My love
Dear my love ,
I have been waiting for you
Lately i have been getting high on those monday blues
without you its like i am without me
But i know that you would come back to me
To the home , made for us three
The little one is gone
Now its just you and me
Loosing her was painful more
to you than it was to me
Its been years since you and her
are gone ,
Dear my love ,
I have been waiting for you
-s
such a cutu poem💗
Theme – Conveys Well the message and the feelings. I will suggest using more Figurative language to make it more attractive.
Language – Has been used. but very barely. But the theme gives great opportunity for creating great mood to evoke the feeling.
I read with my own Sound and rhyme. Please include appropriate punctuation marks and gaps. It may bring in right sound, rhyme and structure.
Context well understood.
Good attempt, keep writing.
All the best