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   June 23, 2023

   Ankita Maurya

   Hi.
   This poem can really be improved if you used commas and full stops instead of Ellipsis. I understand that the attempt is to make the poem look more wishful and echo-like, but it comes off as someone who keeps getting lost mid-sentences.
   I think you can look into this video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1CF-CiP3XbU&pp=ygUoaG93IHRvIG1ha2VtYWtlIGZyZWUgdmVyc2Ugc291bmQgd2lzaGZ1bA%3D%3D
   Hope this helps!

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